Minimaru, the new Shadow Lord? I think soFollow

/cheer great stuff!!!! keep it up!!

all right!! the story continues!! where you been Kolvar? I want to know my fate!

Put me in it somewhere ;_; at least let me get my ass whooped by Maik or something, lol.

Pressng her body tight against the wall, Yuffi listened. The steps where light and ever so short. They stop occasionally and then would suddenly start up again. She could hear them as if they were her own but the rest barely even noticed. "I would bet my tail on it that it's a Tarutaru." She said looking gravely at Cloudstrif.

"Minimaru?" interjected Vegnagunn. Looking over at Cloudstrif also. Shrugging his shoulder, Cloudstrif peered his head around the corner. What he wasn't Minimaru but another Tarutaru. He gave Vegnagunn and Yuffi a reassuring look as he stepped out. Zeos reached out to stop Cloudstrif but he shrugged him off.

"Hello friend." Cloudstrif had caught the Tarutaru by surprise and he had his axes out in a flash. Shaking his hand at him, "I mean you no harm my friend. Just curious what a lone Warrior is doing here by himself." This seemed to ease the Tarutaru.

Replacing his axes slowly but still lookng around causiously, "I am Hilander. Emassary of Valarks." sighing heavly as he finished replacing his axes. "She has sent me to follow a group of adventurers in here. And...." perring around behind CLoudstrif, "you would appear to be the group."

As if they knew they were found, Yuffi, Zeos, Vegnagunn and Winnie stepped out from their hiding places. They looked at Hilander and then at CLoudstrif. "Tell us why you are following us my good Adventurer Hilander." Cloudstrif stared down at Hilander sternly.

"well, I was sent to help on your journey and report to my employeer. She reuires the knowledge you will gain from your mission." looking around with a look of great fear. "Minimaru is throwing the world into disarry and now, we must stop her. If she was find a way to release the wyrens from their slumber, we would all be doomed. Valark only requires your service in stopping Minimaru here and now."

Hilanders arm moved so quickly, Cloudstrif barely had time to rise his shield, but their was no need for it. The tomhawk flew pass CLoudstrif's shield, right pass Zeos's left arm and smack the Golbin square in the head. It fell over as they all gasped and slowly removed their weapons.

Looking from the Goblin to Hilander slowly, "It seems we are in your debt good friend. Join us if you like or report back to Valark about situtation, but we ust be off. Time is short." With that he turned and ran farther within castle.

Glad to see you started writing again, but don't put Maikeru to bed XD

Maikeru awoke some hours later, refreshed but anxious. He crawled out of bed and dressed quickly, almost forgetting his weapon. He left the rental moogle house that Valark had arranged for him and entered into the buseling world of Lower Jueno. This place use to be the center of all Van' Diel till White Gate was rediscovered. He smiled as he remembered days pass, sitting here, watching mighty adventurers walking by him. He trudged on through the swarms of people to Valark's office.

He walked through the main door and the lady behind the desk said Valark was in her office. Maikeru nodded and walked on down the stairs (almost dc'n as he entered the lower level:P). This was to say the least, an interesting place. Mercants selling rare items where down here, but only sold to members of the Tenshido. Another memory of getting his invitation to the Tenshido flashed through his head as he walked by them. Pushing open Valark's office door, he saw her talking to a small Tarutaru he regonized as Hilander.

"... thank you very much Hilander. That information is quite useful. I am sorry you had to put your life at risk for it but we now know of valuable allies we have." Looking up as the doors open, "Maikeru, have a seat my friend I was just finishing up some business here."

Hilander, please wait outside for me, I have another task for you." He bowed slightly as he did a quick turn and walked through the open doors, closing them as he passed.

"She is headed for your homeland of Bastok Maikeru. My informants have passed this information on to me not but an hour ago." She watched his face for any sign of emotion but he was blank.

"I need to get there. I will take an airship." getting up quickly. "I must be off...."

"Wait!" he stopped abruptly. "There is more if you will show some patiences my friend." sighing loudly she watched as he sat back down.

"I was planning on sending you there, but first I need a favor. If my information is right, she will arrive in Bastok in a matter of hours, so we have a short time."

Reaching into desk, she pulls out a sealed scroll. Standing up and walking around her desk she placed the scroll in Maikeru's hand. "Once your ship sets off in Port Bastok, you are to proccedd to Metal Works and take the lift up. THere u will find a Cid. He neds this letter immediately. After delievering this scroll to him, you are free to find Minimaru." Looking down at her friend with mournful eyes. "Be careful. I fear little is left of the old Minimaru we all knew and loved."

Hurry, the ship leaves soon. They will hold it a short time later for you, I have asked them to do so, as a favor." winking at Maikeru, " and one more thing. Take this, as a gift myfriend." She handed over a parcell to him that set under his arm and walked out of the room. Running for the ship to Port Bastok.

Well time has come to call an end to this. Sorry but I will no longer be posting on this thread :(

BUTTTTT...... Im revising and will make new thread and post there :P

yeah really kolvar!! what happens??

ooooo thats not true...I would love to read a book with your ideas in it. The thing is, even though the elements are the same, the personality of the story would be different and that will create different outcomes and characters and events...so don't be shy, be who you are and say what you want to say, people will want to read it on that level...thats why I read books anyway. I have everything from cheap crime novels to poems to Satre as recreational reading, I read cause I like the personality of the book, not because it is about a specific thing. That may be the initial attraction, but it doesn't hold my interest, only the writing does.

o_ob

actually the book is very slow lol I have trouble with length. I tend to want to condense so much that I have to go back and add tons lol. meh one day I will get it done.

Pikko I will give you some Tree Cuttings if you sticky this soI dont have to dig it up every few weeks :P

Edited, Aug 21st 2007 7:01:45am by Kolvar

very cool Darkdoom^^


Kolvar, one author I really LOVE, he isnt like super popular but does well in Europe ( where he lives ) writes things really condensed and specific, so don't let that bother you...I don't know how to explain what I am saying really.

He writes what he wants to say, not what he thinks the reader needs to know. I really enjoy that aspect since instead of being spoonfed, I have to actually work a little to keep things together.

If you PM me your addy, be glad to send out a book or two by him so you can see what ima saying.

Sorry it took me so long to read the new parts Kolvar. When I actually did find the time to come check out the forums again, Garuda wasn't loading for me for some reason.

I've read the new stuff now and it seems things are getting excited cept Maikeru isn't from Bastok, but you can write this story however you want cause it's yours XD

Maikeru was raised by a hume woman in Mhaura (going by the story Maikeru thought up for his galka), and in-game his allegiance is to Windurst. Anyway, keep writing!

There is a trick that was found out not long after a new tunnel was opened in Gusgen Mines. The tunnel lead to a newly rediscovered area known as Oldton Movalpolos. This is a place of Goblins of greater size then any known before in Vana D'iel. Since it's discovery, there has been a silent war with Bastok. Until recently, there was no peace, but now it has come to pass that a time of calm exist.

Many Bastokans now have trade set ups with Moblins. Cid, a reknown inventor. He has been traveling to Oldton Movalpolos more and more lately, collecting new types of ore and learning from the Moblins. Recently, he went to Oldton Movalpolos to speak with their chieftain about trade of ore with all of Bastok.

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Thayos ran from the Spire of Dem to Gusgen mines. He knew of a trick that would bring him close to Bastok with a simple spell. As he ran, he thought of all that was transpiring in Vana d'iel lately. Royal Family in San d'oria had disappeared. Star Sybil hasn't been answering any summons or allowing visitorsto her chambers. Many new and old adventurers have turned up dead or missing. The world is changing he thought. Shaking his head slowly, he stopped and focused on a Tunnel Worm that had popped out of the ground. He quickly spoke the words for Aspir, a spell that would take a portion of the Worms magic and refocus it into his body. Felling the charge of the magic, he ran on as the Worm attempted to cast a minor spell on him. He entered into Gusgen Mines unharmed.

He took a few turns till he came to the newly dug tunnel that would lead to Oldton Movalpolos, from there he cast a spell of escape. He quickly blinked out and reappeared outside a tunnel in the area of Northern Gustaberg. Adjusting himself quickly, his vision cleared slowly but just as it did, he saw a small shape appearing in front of him.It was a small Tarutaru wearing Red Mage garb.

Small lines of brown energy wrapped around her Engulfing her fully as a large circle of great power formed on the ground as a behemonth of a onster rose from it. Flexing its muscular arm and yelling out a shout of that shook the earth around him. Thayos stepped back.

He looked at the Tarutaru quickly and saw a smirk cross her face, the color faded from his. She winked at him and the behemonth known as Titan walked towards Thayos. He took another step back and attempted to turn around and head to the tunnel. His right arm flung out as his body started to turn, but he stopped as his arm was grabbed by Titan. He looked up at it then at Minimaru as she sat on the ground watching, enjoying.

It pulled him closer, grabbing his other arm and pulling his arms far apart. He winced and he felt his body stretch and keep stretching beyond its limits. His shoulders popped lightly as he screamed. Titan keep pulling harder and harder. Throwing his head back in agony he felt his right shoulder giving way. His muscle tearing slowly, then his left arm popped completely out of socked and he scream a scream that could raise the dead.

Titan kept pulling at him harder it seemed. He could feel every muscle tear, every nerve tear, every bone crack. He screamed again, the pain was to much. He felt blood flowing down his lips and look to see part of his tongue on the ground, bitten off in an attempt to stop himself from screaming. His arms were about to give, he knew it, hearing all the crunches and grinds in his shoulder.

His arms stopped hurting. He fell to the ground and looked to his sides. BLood poured out of where his arms should of been. He looked up and saw his arms in Titan's hands. Blood dripping from them, bone sticking out. He started to scream but was stopped as his own arm came down and hit him across the face. thayos lied there, not feeling the blows hitting his limp body. In the last moments of his life, his mind slipping into a surreal state. Taking him back to the day he started his Red Mage trainging. His father showed clearly in his mind's eye.

He stood proud and tall, gleaming in red. His father was one of the greatest Red Mages Bastok had ever produced. His abilities were only second to a Red Mage trainer in the city of San D'oria. The day he left for his trainging, e smiled down on him proudly. Handing Thayos th sword he would carry till he was given his fathers. He explained to Thayos the nature of magic and and how to focus ones energy through their sword. Then he escorted Thayos to the ship that would take him to San D'oria for his formal training.

Thayos trained hard for years, mastering all he could. He would never reach the level of his father had achieved but ever would. One day while trainging in the courtyard, several of San D'oria's high officals approached him, one was the prince himself.

Few knew this but Thayos's father had saved the prince once when he came across him lost in King Ronafoure's Tomb. The Prince never forgot this.

They sat Thayos down and explained to him that a small army of Quadavs had besieged Port Bastok and his father had died defending his beloved city.

The Prince then escorted Thayos home and even spoke a few words at the ceremony. THayos never cried that day.

He was told when the Quadavs attacked, his father was on of the first defenders to respond. Seeing a group of children being chased, he lead them to a house where another family was hiding in the back room. He placed the children with them and stood between a group of Quadavs and the innocents. He fought bravely/.

He was stabbed in the deeply through the back, puncturing a lung. He fought on till a few defenders saw another group of Quadavs rushing the house and went to help. His father slew over two scores of the best before casting a very powerful spell of protection on the innocents in the house. He died shortly after before any White Mages could reach him.

His sword was presented to Thayos that day his father was buried. He laid his own sword in the tomb with his father. He was never without that sword from that day on.

Now his father stood before him, placing a hand on each shoulder. It seemed so real to Thayos, yet so much like a dream. Smiling down on Thayos, "You did well son, time for you to join your mother and I."

Leaving a hand on one of Thayos's shoulders, he turned and lead his son into nothingness.


He passed out or he would of seen Titan beating him with his own arms till he laid lifeless on the ground. Dropping the arms over Thayos's body, Titan vanished.



Minimaru stood up and walked into Oldton Movalpolos.

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Riding his chocobo hard, Maikeru stopped just before the bridge in Nothern Gustaberg. He swore he heard a scream but it might of been wind, he rode on.

Edited, Oct 16th 2007 1:53pm by Kolvar

Edited, Oct 19th 2007 4:31pm by Kolvar

Wow... I really got my ass handed to me!

Oh, and by the way... sticky, you can have this.

This thread was created in Nov. 2005, and it's almost consistently been on the server's front forum page the entire time. I'd say that qualifies the thread for a sticky.

Now, if only our "100 pages" thread would actually move past page 18...

I get sticky ftw!!! and I only had to get Thayos killed.

I updated Thayos's story, so reread it if you wish.

if anyone has the skill and time to edit this sh*te, I would appreciative. I have dont have the skill or it wouldnt need it lol. YOu can message me in the game or on here if you would like to.

Edited, Oct 19th 2007 4:56pm by Kolvar

man this is sooooooo good!!

I was at work and I couldnt find thread and I was so upset, until I noticed it was sticky finally

thanks Thayos for doing that, its the best!

Damn Thayos got the best death ever, seriously, that was awesome. And Hilander's parts are pretty good too, but why kill Valark?! why?! D=

I really hope I'm really not evil in the end though XD

Although I agree that killing off one of your biggest supporters could hurt you, if its the best for the story, its best for the story.

Semi-spoiler thing for a crappy movie:
Have you seen "Stranger than Fiction" With Will Farrell? About the lady who ends up writing a book about his life, and she wants to kill him off at the end but she doesn't do it because he's a good dude. Now, I hated that movie anyway, but at the end where it got all ridiculous where the fragment of his watch is what saved him from dying just made me want to complain and get my $53 or whatever a movie costs to go to these days.

Anyways, point being if it makes the story good, I say keep it. I don't know valark very well, but I think she would understand if you had to kill her character off for the good of the story.

Sent you a PM, Kol

Yeah, it's taking a bit though. I haven't had much free time lately, but I should be able to get some done this weekend. I have a busy schedule =)

Matt wept. He wept for all of Vana'diel. He wept for the souls of the dead. Mostly, he wept for the lost of his only child. He looked down at her and she seemed to be at peace. He ran his finger's through her hair, stroking her cheek as he retracted his hand. She was no more. He was a broken man now.

He stumbled out of room in Upper Jueno her body had been moved to. She would be laid to rest in Maat's ancesteral burial place. This was not suppose to be. No father should ever have to bury their own children. Thoughts swirled through his head, none of them made sense. Who could of done such a vicious thing? Who?

He retreated back to his home in Ru'Lude Gardens and cried more. He cried for almost two days before his Moogle friend came to check on him. Informing him that many adventurers have been by to seek his training. They had all heard the news and accepted that he needed his time.

It was several days after this that Maat resumed his post. Much had cheanged throughout Jueno he noted. More guards were posted and most the adventurers that visited him seem weary of everything that was going. He greeted them with a smile and helpful words. This seemed to set them at ease as they left to complete their training.

Maat wept every night in the solitude of his home and misses his beloved daughter dearly, but he knew he must keep going. He soul, weary and tried felt heavy to him but he carried it with pride.

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Maikeru moved throught Oldton Movalpolos passing many several Moblins as they worked to remove dead Moblins. Silently he cursed Minimaru for what she was doing. No one knew what it was that kept pushing her forward like this but something had to change. His trail was clear and it seemed to lead to the heart of Oldton Movalpolos.

Word was that Cid was there, talking out a trade agreement with the Moblins at this moment. Maikeru knew that Cid could handle himself but still he feared for far greater things then the life of a friend. He broke into a run suddenly and pushed himself farther into the heart of the Moblin nation.

Several hours of running later he reached a great door with several unconcious guards surrounding the area. He looked around at the mayhem that had ensued here. Sighing to himself, he moved towards the door. Stopping just as he reached it, he thought that he had heard something. Fighting! Yes that's wha tit was. He pushed the great doors with all his might forward to see Cid's mighty staff fall upon the ground where Minimaru had stood. He ran forward to try to save both his friends.

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Minimaru had dispatched the so-called Elite Guards of the Moblins. They were guarding the door to their leaders chamber. She laugh as the last one slide off her sword. "Fools." was all she said.

With a wave of her wrist she pushed the doors open to see a stunned Moblin leader and Cid standing as if ready to attack. He walked in slowly waving her sword wildly for show. She paced the room as she watched the two would-be defenders stare at her.

Cid grinned at her an spit out a small toothpick he had in his mouth. Miniaru watched it fall to ground and bounced once. Suddenly CId was upon her, his staff swing across the ground to connect with her body. Luckly for him, he had caught her by surprise and she was launched serveral feet across the room as his staff connected.

Cid didn't wait for her to recover, he lept into the air bringing down his staff with a forceful over head swing. He battle shout alerted Minimaru as she tucked and rolled away. The staff connected solidly with the ground as Minimaru was rolling and pulling herself up at the same time. Before she even finished the roll she was speaking words of magic. SHe stood up as she said the last word and great fireball erupted over the Moblin leader, he fell to the ground shrieking terrible screams of agony.

His blacken formed fell with a thud. No more screams, no more agony. He just ceased to exist. Cid yelled at the top of lungs and leapt into the air again, swinging his staff over his head before bringing it down to connect with Miniaru, she dodged just as the door to the chamber opened.

Edited, Nov 21st 2007 12:24pm by Kolvar

No I really wish you would write more and I wouldn't accuse you anything =P

Next to reading the Harry Potter series, I love your writing the most.

As for the latest section of story.. I'm not sure what I think of it @_@ but I want to see it continue more.

Reminds me of Fanfestival's very first event. They presented Vana'diel's history, and it was nicely done. Kenichi Iwao's english was a little funny, I think he was embarassed but he did make a funny. "Do you know about the Shadow Lord and the history of Vana'diel?" said Kenichi -- "YEAH!!" the crowd yelled -- "Then my work here is done." laughed Kenichi -- "NO!!" the crowd replied. lols for all.